Monday, 27 September 2010

Microfiction Monday #50 & #4

Microfiction Monday reaches its half century, here's the photo:


And here's my response:

Five.
She saw the tanker.

Four.
The last of the oil sailed by.

Three.
She would make them listen.

Two.
She checked her watch.

One.
Boom.


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And all the way back to number four, here's the picture:


And here's my response:

The Three Bears were forced into a witness relocation programme following the Goldilocks Incident.

The fairy bodyguards terrified even them.

30 comments:

Diane said...

Sounds like she's got an evil streak in her..... :O)

EG Wow said...

I guess she showed THEM didn't she? :)

Prayer Girl said...

Dark......

Mine is up.

PG

quilly said...

That first one was excellent. I didn't see the end coming even with the countdown The second one cracked me up. I always suspected that Goldilocks was running a major crime syndicate.

Ellie said...

Wicked, dark, and fun! Just the sort of twisted story I like. Thank you!

Have great week x

Jinksy said...

Boom! Indeed... LOL :)

Susannah said...

Very good, I loved the original take on the first picture and the second was 'just right' :-) I enjoyed them both.

Greyscale Territory said...

The countdown effect in the first micro is a dramatic way to create a climax in micro! Very clever! And the second micro is a brilliant, lightly satiric play with the 3 Bears incident! Enjoyed both!

Lisa Ricard Claro said...

Yikes! She's not as benign a character as she seems. Love the countdown. Very creative!

SouthLakesMom said...

Both are excellent! Although, the whole oil thing on the water . . . I hope she's not trying to get them to listen to her for environmental reasons!

SparkleFarkle said...

Your picture #1 story got me all serious, at which point I found myself saying to me (and you), "Clever, Dave! You've managed to pull the straps on our Thinking Caps that much tighter!" You also had me wondering "Could this be Jack Bauer's "quiet," old aunt gone enviromentally off her nut?" And, yet, I stay in a serious gear. Then I go to Door #2 (<--channeling Monty Hall?) for a second read, where you'll find me STILL HOWLING WITH LAUGHTER! You are my hero, Mr. Dave! Bravo!

Pat said...

I like the effect of the countdown...very dramatic, with tension building to the final moment of the explosion. Very well written.

The second one was hilarious. You are clever and funny! More than one fairy is a bit terrifying.

˙·٠•●❤Sh@KiR@ ❤●•٠·˙ said...

I LOVE IT!
Brilliant!

Mine is up

Have you a Blessed Week!
hugs
shakira

Priyanka Bhowmick said...

great ones!

Mama Zen said...

That first one is brilliant!

David said...

That was funny and very creative. Excellent.

John's comments said...

Nice one - no lingering longing here! My 140 Hope your week goes well

septembermom said...

Awesome!

hope said...

That makes me think of that old line from a commercial, "It's not nice to fool Mother Nature". Sounds like she had a helper to get even. :)

sylviamorice said...

Oh--this one is dark and delicious...and very up-to-date, too!
Have a great week. Cheers!

Michael G-G said...

Never a dull moment when you write, is there?

Thanks for two eye-poppin' pieces.

Have yourself a great week.

erik said...

Excellent, a very different take on the image. Probably my favorite of the week.

Sioux Roslawski said...

A completely unique take on the picture. Well done.

Book Bird Dog said...

i like the different take on these picture prompts. clever.

Rachna Chhabria said...

Hi Dave..you have amazing and awesome style of seeing things. Loved your take on the three bears and Goldilocks.:)

Hope this comment shows up.

Rachna Chhabria said...

I wonder why I am not able to join your follower list, Dave. Will try again tomorrow.

Dave said...

Thank you all.

Rachna, it looks as though it worked in the end, thank you for your persistence.

MorningAJ said...

Oooo. That tanker one is straight to the point. Nice one!

Susan at Stony River said...

Oh, that's a girl after my own heart!! Excellent.

(Loved the 'Goldilocks Incident' too -- making me wonder here -- and I always love that)

jabblog said...

That's one way to make an impact and no room for regrets afterwards. As for the Three Bears - well, they got their come-uppance all right ;-)